V1 Personal Essay Sample 1
In Toy Story, a new toy named Buzz moves to Andy’s house. Buzz is from space and all the toys want to be his friend. But Buzz is hated by Woody, an old Toy from Andy’s house, for being so popular. Similarly, when I moved to Seoul I was hated by Nick.

 

Connection

Relates to the character, Buzz, from Toy Story.

 

 

At Andy’s birthday, all the old toys were excited to see the new toys and play with them. Buzz came from space, with a space suit. He looked very different and talked unlike the others. All the toys wanted to be his friend. Buzz was very happy of his new home. But, Woody soon got jealous and angry because Andy and other toys no longer played with him. So he takes revenge on Buzz by knocking him out of the window. This shocked and hurt Buzz’s feelings. In the end, Buzz forgives Woody and they become good friends.

Context: Story

Specific examples from Toy Story reveal  Buzz’s character.

  • Appearance
  • Specific details
  • Feelings
  • Outcome

 

When I moved to Korea, I was like Buzz. I looked very different in my western-style clothes and spoke English. I made many new friends when I arrived at school because people liked that I was different. I felt very comfortable and happy. But Nick, a student in my class, was jealous of me so he sat in a corner angry. So one day, he took a taxi home with me but got out without paying for the ride. I felt very sad after this, and thought we could not be friends. But just like Buzz did with Woody, I worked to fix the problem. So now, Nick and I are very good friends. Context: Personal Experience

Description of personal experience is comparable to the story.

  • Appearance
  • Specific details
  • Feelings
  • Outcome

 

 

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