V1 Personal Essay Sample 1
In Toy Story, a new toy named Buzz moves to Andy’s house. Buzz is from space and all the toys want to be his friend. But Buzz is hated by Woody, an old Toy from Andy’s house, for being so popular. Similarly, when I moved to Seoul I was hated by Nick.

 

Connection

Relates to the character, Buzz, from Toy Story.

 

 

At Andy’s birthday, all the old toys were excited to see the new toys and play with them. Buzz came from space, with a space suit. He looked very different and talked unlike the others. All the toys wanted to be his friend. Buzz was very happy of his new home. But, Woody soon got jealous and angry because Andy and other toys no longer played with him. So he takes revenge on Buzz by knocking him out of the window. This shocked and hurt Buzz’s feelings. In the end, Buzz forgives Woody and they become good friends.

Context: Story

Specific examples from Toy Story reveal  Buzz’s character.

  • Appearance
  • Specific details
  • Feelings
  • Outcome

 

When I moved to Korea, I was like Buzz. I looked very different in my western-style clothes and spoke English. I made many new friends when I arrived at school because people liked that I was different. I felt very comfortable and happy. But Nick, a student in my class, was jealous of me so he sat in a corner angry. So one day, he took a taxi home with me but got out without paying for the ride. I felt very sad after this, and thought we could not be friends. But just like Buzz did with Woody, I worked to fix the problem. So now, Nick and I are very good friends. Context: Personal Experience

Description of personal experience is comparable to the story.

  • Appearance
  • Specific details
  • Feelings
  • Outcome

 

 

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101 thoughts on “V1 Personal Essay Sample 1

  1. Good example

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  5. 저도 참고할게여

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  7. I like toystory this sample is great to me

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  8. 꿀정보 good

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  9. Good writing and no grammar mistakes..

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  10. THANK YOU!!!!! ^^

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  11. Afterward, I think there are two ways to write an essay.
    First way is to write a story and then explaining my experience in the next paragraph.
    The other way is to write a comparison between me and the story at the same time in one paragraph, showing various similarities.
    Synthetically, there were two ways and these acknowledge helped me a lot.
    (I will have a writing test today! Max teacher’s class!!)

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    • Yes. I can see varity of way to write personal essay. I have to use this at my book the ‘graveyard’☺☺☺☺

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  12. GREAT!!!

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  13. Good example! I love it!

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  14. It’s hard but it’s great I think!!^^**

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  15. Good example!!

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  16. GREAT

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  17. Thanks to give me a example!

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  18. Thanks to give me a great example.

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  19. Awsome!!

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  20. Good
    Very good

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    • Hi robin? I am Joon! It is a great sample! Isn’t it?

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  21. 쉽게 공부를 할 수 있어서 좋아요!!!

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  22. 쌩큐 for excellent essay example.

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    • I agree. In v1 SA test, we can look very simple.

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  27. Good!!!!

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  28. Thanks, It helped me lot

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  29. It is good.
    Thanks, teachers!

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    • ^^.

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  30. You are very good at writing. It was very helpful in my writing.

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  31. 65빠염

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  32. It really helps me!

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  33. NICE BUDD

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  34. Well written!

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  36. The ship go to mars. In there , many organism are in there. They search people can live in mars

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  37. You are very good at writing!!!!!!!!

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  38. Hi. It’s good.

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  39. Good!

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  40. good writing!

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  41. Well written, but having the same experience is rare.
    So, it is unrealistic.

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    • Of course it’s rare, think of it! Almost nobody can have the same experience. That can make the essay more interesting.

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  42. Good personal eassy helps me alot

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  43. Well written, but having the same experience is rare.

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  44. Good

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  45. Wpw, It helps me a lot!

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  46. 홍예린~~

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  47. Good

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    • 영어 이름좀

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  48. 모두들 손! 지금 302호 손!

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    • 나도 302호다

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      • 나 Alice

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  49. 나 Hans

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  50. 나 eddie

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    • ㅇㅇ

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  51. ?

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  52. 2015 4 17 에 302호 있는 사람 손! 나 kiddy

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    • ㅋㅋ

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    • 서지민 나도!

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  53. I think this is very good to study. Wow this is nice. In this story, it use toy story. very nice.

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  54. Feel good

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  55. Derek haha

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  56. Useful

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    • Me too

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  57. I hate toystory.

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  58. This progrem is good

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  59. This progrem is good!

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  60. I like it

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  61. Good

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  62. Useful, but boring

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  63. Helpful

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  64. I think it is good passage^^

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    • also there has lot of detail

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  65. Goood!

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  66. Greatttttttt!!!!!!!

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  67. Good

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  68. GGGGRRRRREEEEAAAATTTT!!!!!

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    • Yes

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    • I agree with 형준

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  69. Good

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  70. 진성아!!!!!!ㅋㅋㅋ

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  71. Great
    Good

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  72. 임진성이 씀

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  73. 하이

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  74. Great!

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  75. Good

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  76. Helpful.

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  77. This is incredibly helpful! Thank you!

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  78. Setting up clear settings and characters to prevent any further confusions from the readers. From the beginning of the essay, make sure to be clear with the part/event/character of the book your experience will be related to. Also, I think it is important to use a lot of figurative language or metaphor in personal essays to give readers rooms for imagination and feel like the writer is telling them the story so vividly that he or she is right in front of them. Finally, do not exclude the detailed descriptions of personal feelings and emotions to spice up the story!

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  79. *Using quotations is one of the most effective way to present the character’s traits or situation related to your own experiences. Not only does it enhance your writing, but it defines the idea and key points clearly. With that being said, make sure to do it properly: http://www.wikihow.com/Use-Quotation-Marks

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  80. Using quotations is one of the most effective way to present the character’s traits or situation related to your own experiences. Not only does it enhance your writing, but it defines the idea and key points that you’re trying to define. With that being said, make sure to do it properly: http://www.wikihow.com/Use-Quotation-Marks

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  81. I’ve had kids tell me that they can’t write anything because they didn’t have any life experiences that were similar to specific events that happened to the character in the book. It’d be good to have them, over the course of the few weeks leading up to the essay, think not about specific events but maybe overall feelings or the character as a whole (instead of just the character in certain parts). This might help them plan out their essay when the time comes.

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  82. Use of transitions are critical in an essay where connection and context are key features. They will enhance the flow of the essay greatly. It’s important to review key transition words or terms with students, even if you only review just the basic ones. Always remind them why transitions are important for writing (to connect ideas)!

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  83. Unlike writing for the C2 Personal Essay, the V1 personal essay requires a more contextualized story where the setting and characters are more clear and relatable. Just as this story sample has shown, it is important to provide personal examples that relate closely to the major ideas of the story. For example, the main idea that the story sample illustrates is the reconciliation of feeling alienated; by providing a personal example of overcoming the moving to a new environment, Korea, and then making friends that you had troubles with at the beginning, a personal story that is relevant to the main ideas of the storybook is met.

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  84. Step 1: Brainstorm topic ideas.
    Step 2. Choose a topic idea you like and can easily write about.
    Step 3. Think of supporting details and examples for your topic choice.
    Step 4. Organize your details in an outline. (Main point, reasons, examples and explanation)
    Step 5. OK, NOW you are ready to write ^^

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  85. Question:
    How many steps are there to writing?

    Answer:
    MORE than just one step!

    Many people write more effectively if they first brainstorm and plan B4 they write.
    YES! This does take some time, however it saves writing time later after you have thought about WHAT to write and HOW to organize it.

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    • THANK YOU JEFFREY

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